You take your lovers like pez
Tearing through this town,
breaking those in your way like
the spines of tiny animals
Teenage angst falls around you
like leaves, bleeding colour onto
your face.
We will all crumble at your feet,
but in the end
you will be alone with what you have done.
Author notes
This is about a guy who moved to my school this year, and is causing all of my friends so much pain, and therefore me.
A contest entry
- Write about a person. by samantha jean.
600 points, ended October 31, 2008, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What be your thoughts?
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This is such a beautiful peice, it's so heartfelt and powerful. The guy sounds like an ass. >:[ Great poem though, a wonderful metaphor.
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you are very wise for such a young age. but no one can cause anyone to "crumble". only you can let yourself. good write
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Why is he causing all your friends pain ?!
am i now not the only one out of our network ?!
god damnit i knew it would happen :'(
FUCK. -
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he's been causing EVERYONE pain since he got here.
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who ?!
msn mee !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I think your choice of person was ver clever. Poem is short, yet has a lot of information and emotion.
Good write, and good luck in my conest. -
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Thank you.
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Yes, there are guys like that out there. "you will be alone with what you have done." But it's hard to say if he will feel anything at all.
Gotta watch out for goodlooking, charming men, especially when they are young. -
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I hope he feels something, and it's not something good.
Because apparently right now he feels something for every girl he meets. -
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It has to catch up with him sooner or later. For one thing, these girls have parents and families and concerned friends. He'll get his, that's my prediction.
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