No one really knew,
The pain I had been through,
The bruises and the lies,
That I had endured.
You fought so hard to free me,
Not knowing all my chains.
I used to get so angry,
But I'd grown to love your ways.
No one ever cared,
Even then, I thought it true,
For I'd seen the look they gave me,
Every time I dared to tell.
My heart grew sick and twisted,
With every passing day,
As I waited for those words,
To show upon your face.
Your chance had come at last,
You had learned the truth.
You looked to all my filth,
But to you, I was unchanged.
In their eyes, I've always seen,
The words "I pity you."
But instead, with you, I saw,
The plea, "Just be with me."
Author notes
I used the title as the prompt, as well as the poem a bit. Also, obviously, I drew from the word bank.
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- FALLING APART by Temptation..
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just a quick question. what number did you pick?
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I'm not positive, but I think it was #10 =/
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ok thank you.
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no matter how many times i read this, i could not seem to find a way to make it flow... =[ i like it, it just has no rhythem. the ending is my favorite part =] plus i can relate to the emotions. thanks for entering and good luck.
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Poem:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4299577
Pic:
http://chrissiecool.deviantart.com/art/Whine-With-Self-Pity-88080730
Title:
I Pity You
Quote:
"I pity you old man
for your life is running out
and the ones you expect to be by your side
will look at you with pity in their eyes and walk away."
- POISONDAGGERS
WordBank:
lies
anger
bruises
sick
pity
good luck!!!
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