metaphorically speaking hells a arrogant bitch
where you wake up to ceaseless dreams
where delusions lie scorched in tar pitched nightmares
where black is relief from the edges of light
where the curtains are lifted and your blinded by sight
ah but the edge of reason is razor sharp
slashing and dissecting raging your heart
it’s the electric current sparking your brain
it’s opening the doors that drive you insane
it’s the brush of fire caressing your mottled skin
it’s the dripping sweat sizzling in voyeur sin
it’s the torment of the screams that play in your mind
it’s the bottomless pit with a welcome home sign
hells an arrogant bitch coveting pustules of raw red itch
the needle sits empty time for a fix
A contest entry
- Let us take on the Domain of HELL....all metaphors welcome! by ears2hearyou.
1200 points, ended November 7, 2008, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Well written and very vivid! You might check out John Ciardi's translation of "The Inferno". It reads well and is a wonderful portrayal of Dante's hell. However, it will be found that hell is a bureaucracy and the sinners bound by red tape!
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Real strong entry!
This is hell! Inspired writing for this contest.
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whew...your pen flamed the fires of hell...
wiping off the ashes of it right now!
well done!
Power and imagery clearly written so we could feel
it's pain and prompt.
my heart asks contemporarily...so why do we walk on by those we clearly see live in realms of hell on earth,
is it fear or pride...are we one step away from
apathy and the self-medicated fix.
I would honor a second write from you.
YOu do not fear your ink!
ears/Seattle
thankyou for your entry!
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