Sinful Slaughter by LadyDementia at All poetry

Amidst falling darkness
shadows start to creep,
sing songs of solitude
that bleed as you sleep.

Echoes of lost sanity
perish in stitched air,
reverberated years
of decadent despair.

Thoughts pulsate demented
mental derangement grows,
tearing rabid flesh
as fragments decompose.

Digest and devour
your putrid tongue,
struggle for breath
with tormented lungs.

Fight the war no more,
let loose demons within,
use the touch of Satan
to slaughter them with sin.

Author notes

Picture prompt
Pic credit: http://dastafiz.deviantart.com/art/praise-of-death-37813356

Kinda sucky I know, may still play with it when not so pushed for time

A contest entry

Dark Picture Prompt Contest!! Can You Handle It? If So Enter. by Sweet Impatience. 1200 points, ended October 22, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Please tell me what you think

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andywontdie
October 24, 2008

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Some pretty harsh pictures, guess that calls for a pretty harsh and hardcore write my dear sis. Your way with words brings the wayward into your dark aura and exposes the dark, the brutal, the raw...just like it should be. Congrats on the gold, in my mind there wasnt even a question you would win
Reptile Lady
October 22, 2008

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Well done honey
I am so pleased you took the gold
and you said your muse was dead LOL
Julie xx
Sweet Impatience
October 22, 2008

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Your poem is very very creepy and dig deeps in the abyss of a darkened hell.. You went up and beyond with this write. the pics creep me out as it is.. your poem just put the nail in my coffin... Potent combination I must say. this btw does not suck at all, so stop thinking that..

I must end this comment now, the bg is freaking me out a bit too much

good luck
kat
mysticstorm
October 20, 2008

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No one does darkness with the fear and grace you do...damn this is perfect for the picture...I wouldn't touch a thing to change it...excellent as always...
best to you!
mystic
Rend the Veil
October 16, 2008

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Damn Scarry!
The pictures alone are damn scarry I live alone ,i am going to have to have some one come over and put me to bed, Hey what a concept! but its true, i am so afraid!

let me get focused here, your write was very very Horrific ! I couldnt even get my self in a state of mind to write something that dark and demon satan filled very very realistic, well penned they say that hell is like that..

Rend
Reptile Lady
October 16, 2008
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Oh my god awesome ! dark grim and freaked the hell out of me.
Digest and devour
your putrid tongue,
struggle for breath
with tormented lungs.
You are fantastic hun I love it
Good luck in the contest
Julie x
kiwigirljacks
October 16, 2008

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Scary pictures!!!!

Wow hunny I think you've gone very deep on this and not just penned something about what the pic shows but about the demons within that seek to devour the mind!

Fantastic!!!

♥
Fritz O skennick
October 16, 2008

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Oh so dark... And I love it!!!
Fangtastic!!!
Great descriptive narrative, rhythm & rhyme...
With great wordplay/choice/use that had me captivated throughout...
Absolutely outstanding...
Well done!!!

Great pic too............
HaileeDear
October 16, 2008

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Oh muh gosh. had me on the endge of my seat from beginning to end. Im craving more!!! Your writes are all so amazing
WolfHeart
October 16, 2008

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OOoooooooohhhhhhhhhhh yummy!!! You are so good at this stuff. I love this one. Best of luck in the contest!
Disturbed Prodigy
October 16, 2008

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far from the sucky you think, this is amazing i love your words my friend, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
Ktulu Blackwolfe
October 16, 2008

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Whoa!

This is very vivid imagery at its best. To say the least you did justice to the pic. Not to mention creeped me out a bit too, that is not an easy task.

**Ktulu Blackwolfe**