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Black Hole

He who knows of the black hole,
Shall come forth and sacrifice there soul.
She who doesn't, shall wear a fleece as black as coal,
Scurry and subside themselves, as would they do a mole.
The individual who knows of the black hole,
Shall decimate as if a smoldering sole.
A foot, careful, not to stride too deep,
Or be swallowed into the black hole, steep, underneath.
Bluntly decay like the green of a forest, or as would do a leaf,
Not a nice sight to bear, nor nice to reap.
Swallowed up by the black hole, and forever reside in grief.

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  • bigperm
    November 3, 2008
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    you have a nice flow

    I can see alot of macabre imagery, which I like

  • brokenheartedbaby
    October 28, 2008
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    uhmm. . .

    The first thing was you probly been thru alot and this is yo way of show'n it. but it was good.