Dancing on the dreams which we had to leave behind.
To the ends of our love, you will dance me tonight.
Memories from melodies, each of diverse kind.
A waltz to our daughter that got your brilliant mind.
While the longing inside me detonate with your sight.
Dancing on the dreams which we had to leave behind.
Serenity by each other, is what we find.
In my sweet memory you will live on each night.
Memories from melodies, each of diverse kind.
A few dance steps to music, let the grief unwind.
“Hold me forever” is my utmost deepest plight.
Dancing on the dreams which we had to leave behind.
With this, death is too weak to break the ties that bind.
Again I’ll miss you with the break of morning light.
Memories from melodies, each of diverse kind.
Daily, reason to our loss remains undefined.
Embracing me tight, as you dance with me tonight.
Dancing on the dreams which we had to leave behind.
Memories from melodies, each of diverse kind.
Author notes
Prompt:
Dancing to the end of love
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7pA5UhNaYw0
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Hi Becks ! This is beautifully written !
Poignant and heart touching . A very
evocative read . Thank you for sharing
it was a pleasure to read indeed ...
Best wishes & hugs , Friend Easy
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Oh, a fine vllanelle, too few people now even attempt it. Just a wonderfully romantic and passionate poem, well done!!
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Real (poetry)
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Beloved Becks ...
You write from a deep well of sorrow, but also of true love. And the wonderment of this love is manifest in the delight of your precious daughter ... How well and mature in spirit and in soul you defined this loss:
With this, death is too weak to break the ties that bind.
I know the hardship behind that short sentence. I also know the victory of Love over death. Thank you for your reminder.
You did honor to the Villannelle. Well done, Precious. You created a beautiful tiara with your tears.
Love
Myra
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I love the soft, romantic feel to this. Has it all - love and loss, memories past and present.
Lovely!
best wishes in your contest.
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This is so beautifull! There's a nostalgic underlying atmosphere to this poem. It is very difficult as a poet to capture emotion in writing, this poem is brimming with emotion, just like my eyes now.....
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With this, death is too weak to break the ties that bind.
Again I’ll miss you with the break of morning light.
Memories from melodies, each of diverse kind << i loved these lines, they were so passionate and the poem overall was wonderfulyl written
it was a great write
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"memories on melodies".. and how beautifully you sing your loss, but even more, how softly and lovingly you sing of what will always be with you, Becks. I know this one is very personal.
The Villanelle form is so perfect for love's song as the repetition confirms the love that was there, and that will always linger and comfort. Very nice take on the prompt and with consistent meter too.
Thank you for sharing this lovely entry with us.
~ Nicolette
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i am so envious of your use of the word 'detonate'!
yes, how truly does love seem like a series of detonations, ones to make the ears and heart ring, a fireworks display unequaled by any holiday.
so many seem to simply 'drift' through love and relationships, unguided and unfocused, but those who hear the music and dance the real dance find love's ultimate truth, and for that, there is no real end
thanks for this delightful entry
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Yes..the life continues with the dreams and dreams are renewed with the momments of life..and this goes on..till the life is ended..this touchypoetry makes me little uneasy because of its sadness..yet I accept it as a part of the life..a part of the truth as well..
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Just wonderful
When feeling is deep in heart it comes out with vigour and your poem is just that. It is so nice to see your bond you have indicated by the line "death is too weak to break the ties that bind". A very good job, poet.
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Well I think that this is beautiful but yet so sad.You did a great job with the prompt good luck to you in the contest be well
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