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Scars

Three days, scarred her soul since he passed away.
“Passed away”… seemed such a strange term to use.
Brutally stabbed in the chest where he lay,
he was gone…  and she had nothing to lose.

One could feel the courage, in that soft blank face,
as she stepped behind those cold steel bars.
He was the killer, in a murder case,
for the rest of her life, she would wear those scars.

Face to face with her husband’s murderer,
the tension was thick and dark in that cell.
He cursed… and said he’d never heard of her.
She held her composure, so very well.

It’s a selfless love she holds for this one,
he destroyed her life but he's still her son.

 

 

 

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Prompt: Selfless love.

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  • myrataal silver member
    March 22

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    Hallo Amera!

    I was busy and did not read you for some while now ... and HERE I discovered that wondrous Gold!

    Congratulations Poetess and thank you for being such an inspiring writer.

    Love
    Myra


  • Dark Otter
    November 3, 2008

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    What heavy weights have weighed in here!

    I agree about liking ths story. It is difficult in 14 lines of a peom to have a well done story with a twist ending, a golden moment for the queen of form.


  • penman gold member
    November 2, 2008
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    Excellent

    A powerful and very gifted use of sonnet form. So deserving of the gold. Congratulations.

  • Eusebius
    October 17, 2008

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    Oh, so excellent! The final line caught me totally by surprise! Superb! this fine sonnet made me think of some of E.A. Robinson's sonnets, in content, not in form. Loved it!


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    This is such a chilling interpretation of a prompt, you think like me, colouring outside the lines a little. I enjoyed the wording and the way in which this flowed off the page and to the tongue. Best to you in the contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    Wow sis!! This gave me goosebumps!! That would definitely be a selfless love indeed! But I uess a parent always loves a child no matter what..

    Amazing!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 16, 2008
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    Killer sonnet

    Well written with a twist and a splash of vermouth


  • HaleyMary
    October 16, 2008

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    Powerful write, Amera. Great take on the prompt. It's amazing sometimes how some people can destroy life for others and yet they will still accept and love that person for all they are. Thanks for sharing your talent and keep that pen flowing.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    gaah. What a powerful write with a wicked twist at the end! Perfect form from that master of all writes I love it! Good luck in the contest!


  • StarEyes
    October 16, 2008

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    Sis,

    Wow! What a twist at the end of this one! But you know, it said, "Selfless Love" and you sure nailed that one! This is great! I love this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Super-man
    October 16, 2008

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    O.. M...G

    Stunning moving and chilling.  I hope to never have to experience something like that.

    What a bittersweet love-hate situation.

    Selfless indeed

    Awesome writing.


  • malmadre gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    You have a talent for adding a twist! This kind of selfless love twists the heart. I hope that I never have to experience it in reality. You can whip out a sonnet for every topic given. Well done!


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    October 16, 2008

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    My sweet friend.. I havent been on too much lately and trying to catch up on my reading. I just loved this piece. Of course your form was impeccable, as always..The dynamics were fantastic and it had a raw and honest approach to the prompt.
    Well done..
    Good luck in the contest.
    Much love
    Noreen


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    I like the way you have handled this, nothing high-flown in the language despite the formal structure, and (as Jeff pointed out) a softened meter.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 16, 2008

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    Wow very deep!!! This is excellent sis!! You did a very fabulous job with this piece!! This is so well written excellent details and descriptions!! Marvelous portrayal!! You truly did an amazing job!! I love it!


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    October 16, 2008

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    Shocking!

    Very heart breaking to love and hate someone at the same time. Great expression on selfless love.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Powerful writing on a heartbreaking theme.

    Softly metered to add to the heavily understated nature of the whole poem. Great Stuff

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