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Rise and Fall

Hear ye,Oh hear ye
I,the King of Happyville,declare the great RISE and FALL
of Ladyjane on her tall,very tall pedestal.
So come one,come all
Behold - "Thee lovely Ladyjane"!
Hee hee...me thinks she has gone insane
just of late she has been so so "unstable".

Come on,no need for cash!
Come one,come all
Let us watch and let us see
just how far she can fall
off her tall,very tall pedestal.
Hee hee...me thinks she is gonna crash..
SMASH
like a china cup.
Oh she is so full of muck.
Yuck..yuck..yuckity yuck.
Boy do I hate muck.
Lets pull the toothpicks out from under her
and down she will come
crashing,smashing down off her tall,very tall pedestal.

Hee hee...let us play a bit of sport
and teach a lesson to her kind of sort
- drama queens and duplicitous games are not allowed.
In our very own town we cry!
She cannot pull the wool over one's eye.
No selfish twists or tantrums and put on fits.
Hee hee...lets smoodge cupcakes on her face
that will get rid of her out of our place.

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  • Edited
    October 16, 2008
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    ouch! GOOD but ouch
    nicely done


    • LadyJane13
      October 17, 2008
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      thanks

      Ta for the comment - nice to know you enjoyed it!


  • pumpykin
    October 16, 2008

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    Ingenious

    Omg this is now my favourite poem of all time
    Lol...let's smoodge cupcakes on her face...the whole thing is just brilliant :]


  • KyleBerg gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    !
    The pure originality of this piece blew me away.
    Such clever ideas, brilliantly executed.
    Me thinks you have outdone yourself with this poem (in more ways than one )
    Love the metaphors and imagery.
    Also great use of what would appear to be accidental rhyme.. also a strong rhythm.

    Wonderful


    • LadyJane13
      October 16, 2008
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      aint

      no accident,worked very hard on the rhyme .lol

      • KyleBerg gold member
        October 17, 2008
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        I understand.
        But because i thought they could be accidental is actually a compliment because it means that they fitted perfectly into the flow =)

        If you understand what i mean

        • LadyJane13
          October 17, 2008
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          Truth

          be known I actually just write what falls in my mind at the time.I'm no professional writer, just...me.
          So...I am very flattered that my work is considered remarkable.


  • kermie4201
    October 16, 2008

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    Wow, that was ridiculous. A wee-bit out of the ordinary, but i liked it, it made laugh. The symbolization really stood out too, with the town and the pedestal and so on. Very goofy but yet deep.

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