One day I'll wake to find
that I have lost my mind
That's the only way I could have stayed
while you treated me like your maid
I'm not going to take it anymore
I finally have the guts to walk out the door
I know that this may sound extreme
but nothing is as it seems
My dreams carry me far away
to a place where things go my way
No more being the sad, frightened woman
I am going to find me a real man
Don't you know what it's like to have a dream
and then watch someone rip it at the seam
Well that is what you have done
so I believe that it's time my new life begun
Please tell me what you think
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Dear Maryann,
My daughter, Sue, has come down from the North Island to stay with us for a few days so this comment must be brief.
I think your poem indicates, clearly, that you have not yet 'lost your mind'! Its message is stated articulately and quite forcibly.
Only the last line needs to be corrected for grammar.
How about "I believe it's time my new life is begun"?
I like the poem and wish you all the best in your 'new life'.
Applause, love and hugs, and keep writing. XXX Hugh.
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