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Happens All the Time

on a balcony
in a dimly lit theater
she's precariously leaning
towards a dramatic headline
'cross the top of the obituaries

another's hands rest
upon her alabaster shoulders
revealed by a ballgown's
slipping silver sleeves
anxiously preparing
for a moment of life-saving

yet another beckons,
"release your hold,

i will catch you"
while standing meters below
on scarlet flooring
treacherously tempting her

one deep intake of breath
and she's falling back into the arms
of the one waiting
behind the balustrade

she cries out
"liar!"
to the one lingering below
for the sanguine floor
was only a glimpse of the future
her own blood, the dye

once more
inhale the cold air
of the theater


empty save one

never was there
another above
and one beneath

not to worry though
for her
this happens all the time

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  • etoile
    October 25

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    wow. I like how the title relates to this. it adds more scariness to the poem. (sorry I couldn't think of a better word than scariness..) I like the imagery of this scene as well. especially the description of 'alabaster shoulders' that's beautiful. and alabaster is such a pretty word.

    keep on writing


  • new born
    October 19, 2008
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    This is interesting. Veeery spooky *chills* Awesomeness!


  • star-gazer004
    October 19, 2008
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    I loved the imagery and the setting as well. It makes the piece a bit more eerie. Great work.


  • Emms17
    October 19, 2008
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    I liked it. The way it is worded and the content. Bravo, very well done.


  • BarbedWireButterfly
    October 18, 2008

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    Interesting. The theme you decided to take on was very interesting. I could see the alliteration which was awesome. The imagery also helped to push this poem forward. Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • pumpykin
    October 16, 2008
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    Wow

    This is kinda eerie...love it

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