His heart leapt out of his chest, not able to take his eyes off of her
The day he had waited so anxiously for, came with the fury of a hurricane
She felt as if her feet were glued to the floor, unable to move
not sure if it were a dream or reality, she cried tears of happiness
He knew he had never cared for another woman, the way he cared for her
unsure now, if he would be able to provide her with what his vows would promise
As if she had read the thoughts of his heart, she found his gaze and reassured him
without words, she conveyed her confidence in the life they would live as one under God
His feet felt as heavy as a building made of stone, he smiled to himself
thanking the ritual that it was not him who had to trod down the isle
As she glided down the white lane laced with red roses
he could hear the buzz of comments, the gasps from the crowd
He knew it was his soon to be wife that caused such beautiful chatter
he let out the breath he had been holding, since the day he'd asked for her hand
They both believed in happily ever after, but never thought they'd see it for themselves
It was like a real life fairytale, riding off into the sunset on the wings of love
Author notes
I did this for a class. I had to include the following types of Language into my poem..
Metaphor
Simile
Personification
Onomatopoeia
Hyperhole
Oxymoron
I think I got them all....
In a list
I tried, This was something new to me.
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Beautiful!
Such moving emotion I got lost in there for a bit while reading. Things happen so fast and it's hard to tell if they are really happening at times, and we always hope these things are good and not bad. This is like dreams coming true, and the title works well for me.
I also love the way you moved back and forth between his and her emotions, thoughts, and feelings. It gives the whole piece a lot of depth and makes these two people more real and more easily pictured inside my head.
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Looks good to me...What's a metaphor...
His feet felt as heavy as a building made of stone
(using "like" or "as" to compare two ideas - Simile)
came with the fury of a hurricane
(human traits to non-living objects - Personification)
the buzz of comments (word imitates the sound describing-Onomatopoeia)
heart leapt out of his chest (exaggeration - Hyperhole)
If teach get mean send to me...I'll show them an example of expletive...lol
Hugs...Eddy
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lol... you'll show them an example of an expletive? Thank you for the smile Eddy! You always seem to brighten my day. You always come around whenI am feeling down. Thank you!!!!
xoxo and extra hugs,
Criss
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samelove everylove
i love this poem!!!
s if she had read the thoughts of his heart, she found his gaze and reassured him
without words, she conveyed her confidence in the life they would live as one under God
i can feel it! i wish it was like this tho!!
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"As if she had read the thoughts of his heart, she found his gaze and reassured him
without words, she conveyed her confidence in the life they would live as one under God"
I know these loudly quiet moments. I have had a wondrous share in my lifetime.
"real life fairytale"
Now that is an oxymoron! LOL
Excellent! What grade did you get?
LOVE YOU ♥
Renee
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Hello My Beautiful Renee,
I dont know what my grade is yet. I am hoping that I got all the right types of language into the poem. I think I did, but I've been known to be wrong! I mean MISINFORMED!
I'll let you know what I get when I find out.
Oxymoron.. okay that is one... now only 5 more to confirm! LOL
Criss
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Beautiful....I loved this...the subject, the imagery, the thoughts.
You wrote a wonderful piece!
Smile♫
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