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The concrete's cold in Autumn.

If I could sleep any longer
I would probably die in the curve of your neck.
With the seasons blending backwards;
falling in the sun,
and waking as the snow picks up.

And it's like I've catapulted out of myself.

The way your words sink into the air
reminds me of the way ships sink
into the middle of nowhere.

Can you taste the way your
actions and words come together?
It's like a collision of puke and asphalt;
and I'm cracking my skull in it.


What did they call this before?
Noise.
Always answering a question
with a question and a peace sign.

Just noise.
Static energy that makes a sound,
but means nothing.



And he means everything
to a little pounding heart
that barely beats.

And a fluttering heart
that forgets to breathe
when he looks her way.



And the seasons?
They start to mean
nothing.

And your snapshots?
They're unmemorable.

Author notes

I just realized how many people I wrote this about.
It's definitely not all one person.

o.o

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  • usually-untitled
    October 21, 2008
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    oh, wow.
    this was... very hard-hitting.
    i think my only complaint is with the puke reference since i like to think of poetry as existing in a hermetically-sealed land with no unpleasant thing in it. except emotions. err, anyway.
    favourite stanzas:
    And the seasons?
    They start to mean
    nothing.

    And your snapshots?
    They're unmemorable.