I paint my eyes pretty
to subdue the soul.
I paint my eyes pretty
to compromise control.
I draw my own dreams
with pencils and pens.
I draw my own dreams
over focusing the lens.
I sketch my sanity,
Broken and blamed.
I sketch my sanity,
unknown and unnamed.
I earase my early-ons
With something less than pride.
I earase my early-ons
Knowing that by the pen
I have died.
Author notes
I chose to use the picture prompt (and the word bank, obviously). The girl's eyes where my inspiration. 
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Comments
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"I sketch my sanity,
Broken and blamed.
I sketch my sanity,
unknown and unnamed. "
I like that part best
Great Write and
Thank You For Entering
Good Luck
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Indeed a very deep write and I loved it! It's exactly how I feel as well so it definitely caught my attention. It's amazing in its simplicity and I think that's quite a hard thing to muster so a great well done. Thanks a lot for entering and keep up the good work. I also liked the repetition by the way =]
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this is great!! i wish you had made it longer. i like the flow to it. its got almost a songlike rhythem... good luck and thanks for entering
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Poem:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2806446
Pic:
http://beanutputter.deviantart.com/art/behind-blue-eyes-42856010
Title:
Behind My Eyes
Quote:
"A person who wishes she could just die,
Whose heart is torn apart from all the lies,
Now I see all this, hidden behind my own eyes. "
- POISONDAGGERS
WordBank:
dreams
fallen
broken
pride
comprimise
good luck!!!
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