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rise against

blazing steel-fires rise

within a symphony of sound

gathering the eyes to cull

dead bodies from the ground

hellbent in a bind

blinded and leather bound

we rise with glossy eyes

and clear another round

 

dealing in your death

we style with steely sword

waiting to unleash

the beastly under-lord

treading on your track

we will not be ignored

while feeding on the feast

of all the blood we poured

 

holding high our glass

to the unhindered cause 

bending the untrue

we live outside of laws

humbling the axe we

cede the severed clause

feeding on the fires

until the body thaws

 

ripping skin from bone

we feel no sympathies

comely of a corpse

we breed fatalities

bringing all the cowardly

skulls to their knees

crippling Darfur

like eating flesh disease

 


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  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Good grief dear.
    interesting piece

    wishin you the best with it

    this is awesome.

    Love
    Passions


  • Janice M Pickett
    October 16, 2008

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    YIKES. I don't want to make YOU mad LOL. eating flesh disease. ouch, thats creepy. Excellent poem. Full of character(s) dead and alive. hug*


    • sheltered
      October 16, 2008
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      looks at you with puppy dog eyes
      then bites your arm off... lol
      thanks


  • Rob. gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Cool

    Like ya all raw and evil like...guzzling beers and bangin the ol head to some Venom when ya got this one out huh?

    Good stuff bud, awesome really, gonna have to play one of my own....

    *spins top and guzzles*


    • sheltered
      October 16, 2008
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      thanks

      the other contest has some great prompts too


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    this is a well written poem....i was almost hoping...you
    would have put a contemporary slant and ending in it..
    as we have so many wars that feasting the flesh of
    innocence in our world presently.
    ears/Seattle

    very well written poem!

    • sheltered
      October 16, 2008
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      spreading though Darfur was it?
      I like that because it is
      something to rise against
      I think I got it ...thanks


  • VerminVomit
    October 15, 2008

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    "dead bodies from the ground
    hellbent in a bind
    blinded and leather bound
    we rise with glossy eyes
    and clear another round" this is amazing how you show lifeless deathlike imagery and then show life and rising up off the ground
    "we will not be ignored
    were feeding on the feast
    of all the blood we poured" another amazing part i love how you make it like we're standing up and all, but at the same time adding some dark imagery
    the last stanza... breathtakingly awesome, i love the dark imagery there, but at the same time theres light imagery...kinda... not giving away and taking back what is yours...kinda


    • sheltered
      October 15, 2008
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      thanks
      I think i'm gonna have to
      pull the six string
      from it's coffin for this one


  • DolceVito gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    Interesting...

    Interesting write, implying more than what you tell and show (glad to see you shy away from those short-short shorts). Dserving

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