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When the Stars Fly

There is an evening I remember,
A peaceful, clear night.
It’s remembered for its beauty,
And the stars that took flight.

I remember how the stars flew,
Falling like the wool of a sheep being shorn.
I still remember that night,
When hope itself was born.

I remember how the stars pattered
Down from the sky like rain.
And I remember when I caught one
The star’s love and its pain.

I held it close to my beating heart,
A glowing ball of fire.
It glittered and twinkled in my hands,
And I thought it would never tire.

First it glowed a ruby red,
And then like orange sap.
I cupped it in my hands,
And it settled in my lap.

Then it streaked yellow lightening,
Next like brilliant jade.
Only after it flashed sapphire
Did the star’s colors fade.

Like a candle left in the wind,
It fizzed and sparked and then went out.
I fought away the tears
And bit back an angry shout.

Why do all good things
Have to end?
Why do I have to lose
My kindred friend?

But we can’t keep things forever,
Not even a shining flame.
We have to love them while we have them,
And treasure the time it came.

Author notes

entry for pensitivity's contest, option 5, word prompt: star

I ROCK!!! hee-hee. See? i read the rules...entry for MeNoEmo's contest.

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  • Symphony
    February 21

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    "But we can’t keep things forever,
    Not even a shining flame.
    We have to love them while we have them,
    And treasure the time it came."

    This said it all for me, couldn't have summed it up better myself; what a beautiful opening to your poem either, you really set the scene, and i love watching shooting stars, they're so breathtaking!

    Great job, thanks for entering


  • ASmileForYou
    December 10, 2008
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    This is so good! The imagery was perfect, i absolutely adored this poem!


  • justgot2loveme
    December 7, 2008

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    This was really a nice piece.
    Kinda a bitter sweet.
    Sad and loving. Thanks for sharing

    Justgot2loveme


  • SmartBrick
    October 27, 2008

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    AMAZING!

    This was perfect,and yes you do rock!!!Wow,ppl are getting so much more confident these days!(lol....J/K)Perfectly written.Just wht I wanted~


  • The Fun House silver member
    October 27, 2008

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    Bravo, this is an absolutely brilliant poem. I loved it. The feelings and imagery were wonderful
    Your meter and rhyme were extremely good too. This was an absolute pleasure to read.


  • owlish
    October 26, 2008

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    Great descriptions! Good moral to the poem, although in the third to last stanza, the rhyme scheme changes from abcb to abac, which you may want to fix. Thank you for your entry, and for following the rules. Best wishes!


  • Autumn Rain13
    October 18, 2008

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    I think this poem is brilliant, wonderful imagery!!!!!
    And I like how you used colours like jade and sapphire instead of green and blue! Love this poem^-^

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