The thought has occurred to me,
one more than {>} one occasion ,
that if to me you’re ohsodeSIREable,
then w h a tttt’ s to
STOP.
some {other} girl from thinking the exact. same. way¿
Just imagining it makes my stomach t u rn.
But you se e baby, the prob.l.em is
I’m flying your radar
below
& as far as I know, you’reeee just b a r e l y aware that I exist;
and even that is a product. of siblings and classes and painstakingly baked cookies
(and the cheesecake I threw away that no one ever got to taste;
because if you didn’t taste it, then no one would).
And while, for now, you’re unclaimed,
what if some charmer ( who is prettier & actually has the courage, nerve to
→talk to you )
comes along and just neatly s w e e p s y ou off of your feet
oh
that would eat me up (inside)
With every a(ss)cidic kiss she blew in your direction,
a piece of me would c.r.u.m.b.l.e. .. a way;
And while really, I want you to LOVE ME;
at this point, I would be content with your hatred.
I would love to see you really GLARE at me, because though it would hurt,
it would mean that you knew. You would know me, for better or for worse –
can’t you see? I don’t care.
I don’t care what you think, as long as it’s about me.
Author notes
19. I don't care what you think, as long as it's about me
It turned out differently than I thought it might.
Maaaaaannn I'm really trying to do this Dirty Pretty stuff. I really really like it. <3
A contest entry
- I feel so dirty[[pretty]] --With a ~twist~-- by BenziRae.
720 points, ended November 19, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"I’m flying your radar
below"
The formatting of this line worked ohsowell =]
Dirrty Pretty is addictive isn't it?
Great write,
I really enjoyed it =D
Shelly
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reading you author notes;;
im guessing your new to dp,&& just
as a note,I would advise not writing with
the grammar of a third grader,it does not make
it dp,concentrate more on the words,&& youlle'
be recognized as more than just a generic dp writer.
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Haha, alright, well when you say 'the grammar of a third grader', what do you mean by that exactly? The punctuation or what?
I really do want to get better at this, which is why I'm asking for you to clarify.
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I love it!!!
This is amazing!!!!
Great job hun ♥
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