Sunshine in the morning through the window made me smile.
Breakfast on the go, then ride my bike around a while.
Innocence of being young was destined to defile...
Another day, another year has come.
Moonlight on our faces as we loitered in the night,
Pan-handling for some beer money always seemed alright.
Drinking 'til we'd vomit, or we'd end up in a fight...
Another day and many years have gone.
Sunshine in the morning makes me cringe and shield my eyes.
There's no time for breakfast or the commute I despise.
Innocence and fun is gone...age does not compromise...
Another day...and wanting to be done.
10-15-08
Author notes
Three of three with thirteen
& three developing lines
A contest entry
- TRIPLETS ~ painlessly! #133 Allpoetry invited by Lyndon.
3500 points, ended October 31, 2008, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congratulations on the bronze with this good Triplet. You words will echo so true in many ears...I think it's called life
All the best Sue
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Awww...progression..and what recourse do we have? Great story and excellent Triplets. Congrats on the Bronze.
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What a meter!!!
I love it, a gallop of poetry great last lines, and a story familiar to many I am sure.
Wonderful stuff.
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Welldone. I like the form, rhymes and contents. It made me smile.
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Another incredible write by you!
Makes me wish to be young and carefree again.
Funny how when we're kids, we're so anxious to be a grown up...engaging ourselves in adult situations before we are of age lol. And now all I want is to be a kid again.
Anyway I love this poem.
You truely are a magnificent poet! -
i like it
i like how the first and last stanza are like opposite of eachother. very clever and very kewl
"Sunshine in the morning makes me cringe and shield my eyes.
There's no time for breakfast or the commute I despise.
Innocence and fun is gone...age does not compromise...
Another day...and wanting to be done."
i love that!
great write sweety,
~*Princess Cuddle Bug*~
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