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Polished Smiles

A polished smile
bereft of kindness
baits a seductive trap
as unknowing fools
whose dull imperfections
scream for approval
as they casually venture
into the perverse

Such obliging minds
minds are the pleasure
of cruel intentions
seeking as they may
fragmanets of
immoral spontaneity

Desire is a need
to control and ones
own malevolence
accordingly becomes
the seeker of our own
proclivity.

The organ
is the master
the grinder churns
the wheel,
all that spills
is not lost,
if swallowed slowly.

TC 

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  • Shantti silver member
    February 25
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    I love this deep take on the insight of the human mind and it's deepest desires with the apparent general reactions to it. I have to admit I need a dictionary on a couple of words here, but it's alway's good to learn new vocabulary

    The organ
    is the master
    the grinder churns
    the wheel,
    all that spills
    is not lost,
    if swallowed slowly.

    Nicely worded.


  • Denerica
    December 17, 2008
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    Desire is a need to control ones malevolence, nicely quoted and a thought.

    • Tercarro
      December 18, 2008
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      Thank you

      Thanks you so much for reading this I'm grateful
      TC

  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Creative and well done...beautiful imagery...please read the rule...I stopped at 80 words...
    thank you,
    mystic
    • Tercarro
      October 17, 2008
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      Thanks

      Does that mean I have to take out slowly and then resubmit.
      TC

  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Wonderful crafted words you have penned with this poem
    The Polish indeed paints a great write
    Best wishes to you
    Julie


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Deeply thought..

    provoking, and powerfully worded my friend, I love this pen! Yeah, you have an incredible amount of food for thoght in this write, I believe this will easily garner you a shiny!

    • Tercarro
      October 16, 2008
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      Gratitude

      Many, many thanks my friend. Your reflections and time are most welcome. As a writer yourself I really appreciate your considerations. Thank you indeed.
      TC

  • maralisa silver member
    October 16, 2008
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    a nice take on the promt good luck in the contest

    • Tercarro
      October 16, 2008
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      Many thanks

      I am so grateful for your comments and as a fellow Brit they are more than welcome.
      Gratitude.
      TC
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