i tripped
ran too far
fell off the cliff
i felt like i was falling
but slowly
cautiously
as if im on the brink of never hitting solid ground
my head hurts
falling hurts
painful
the memories
the flashbacks in my head
my head is full
it aches
i fell
when, how?
i tripped
ran too far
fell off the cliff
ran too fast
too fast to think
hurts to think
i feel the blood rush
head rush
the fear off falling
i did fall
freefalling
captivated
the air in my lungs
it burns
my lungs ache
there going to explode
my head feels like its going to explode
my head
light
as air
don't remember the memories
the memory
of falling
freefalling
the memory
of tripping
i fell
i tripped
fell off the cliff
that took the life
out my soul
and i awaken
the numbness
i see around me the air
and the cycle repeats
i tripped
ran too far
fell off the cliff
A contest entry
- Contest #1: The Cycle of Falling Down by PaleRaven9790.
900 points, ended October 19, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thanks for editing this for little spelling quirks. I'm one of those -as my friend would call the group of people like us- a spelling dictator. :\
Again, love the thought and premise behind this. Best of luck in the contest!
+R -
I like the thought behind this poem. But, it's kind of a personal annoyance of mine concerning the spelling of words that require an extra letter. For example, 'off' not 'of' and 'too' not 'to'. Overall, a good write. Thanks for entering
Best of luck in the contest.
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