I don't know what to do anymore
I don't know how to feel
I don't know what I'm going to do about you
I don't know how to deal
I wipe the tears from my eyes
and you don't even see them fall
every-time
a part of me dies
you don't even care at all.
Hey baby I'm not trying to make it all about me
you just gotta open your eyes and see
I'm a person too
and I need you.
I need to hear your voice at night
before I go to sleep
At-least
I need to feel your touch
attests once a week.
Its so hard without you here
I fear loosing you baby
everyday i fear the end
Is near
A contest entry
- Show me something. by morgana raven.
900 points, ended December 30, 2008, 82 entries
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I like the random rhyming.
Thanks for entering.
Laura -
your pain is real and exacting. I pain too -when reading particular lines that remind me of the same loss. you're a better person you know. it reads in your poetry true.
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amazing
I read the bold print on the shameless page and i read it. My guy breaks my heart everyday though, not my chick ;-) it kinda made my heart sink, but in a GOOD way, like now I know, more people out there are in a sense ignored and rejected by the person they love. Write more like this and you'll be so gnarly! this write moved me... keep it up ;-)
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Nice write. Full of wonderfully expressed emotion. Best in life.
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Aw, babe???
I hear you.
I do....I hear you...
I think the emotion you're feeling may have affected your typing...
I hope you're ok... pain like this is hard to bear... I've felt it, only they never knew I existed. -
good job
typo, line 20
losing, not loosing
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Very good write. Full of tangible emotion and well worded. Good luck to you in all things.
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aww, i'm sorry
hope it gets better between you two
ily, abbey joy
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