I'm afraid I've shed all the tears I could
In this life time
But still I feel like crying
With the departure of my ole lady
Life hasn't had much meaning lately
A void beckoning to be filled
Now yearning for a touch
Never to be felt again
As gentle as the wind
Coarsing against my skin
Whiffing into the distance
Can't put into words how much I miss my misses
A contest entry
- SAD Poetry--- Let Me Have Your Best by Ativan.
900 points, ended November 2, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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It leaves me with a lot of questions which can be good. Personally, I think you should have written a little more and explained just a tad bit. Nevertheless, I can feel the pain here and it was well done. Good job.
I wanted to add that the last line sums up the entire poem. It is what you are trying to say but you do it directly rather than indirectly. Do you know what I mean? -
I can definitely feel the emotion to this poem because I can relate when I had a lost. This is sad indeed, good luck in the contest.
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