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Let me be

Let me be

Let me be
Can't you see
I'm crying inside
Dying inside
Slowly...

Nagging and crabbing
Desperately you cling
Trying to control me
You're not going to win

The more you grasp
The more I pull away
Keep trying to intimidate
Out the door I'll go one day

No more I'm sorry
No more excuses
This camel's back
Is tired of your abuses

Feeling stronger with each passing day
Know I'll be alright
Doing things my way
I tried for so long to make you see
But you refused to listen
So just let me be...




 

Author notes

I have certainly had moments like these and in talking to others, I know I'm not alone. Fortunately, the moment passes and life goes on... To be fair, I'm sure hubby feels like this, occasionally, lol!

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  • greeny
    October 16, 2008
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    :)..

    i just liked it..

    • Melrose
      October 16, 2008
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      Thanks

      Greeny, glad you liked it. I'm new at this so I'm still getting my bearings, feeling my way... Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.


  • AsIThink gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    Be! (lol)...

    Mel, this is wonderful; lots of strong emotions that cause my brain to conjure up intense imagery. I loved this part a lot:

    "Can't you see
    I'm crying inside
    Dying inside
    Slowly..." I like how you were able to capture that moment and re-tell it as if it were in the 'here-and-now'...that made this even better. Good flow and nice rhyming too. Really surprised me with this one. Very good write here.

    AsIThink...

    • Melrose
      October 16, 2008
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      Awww, thanks man!

      Really glad you liked this one; I almost didn't post it. Also tickled that I "surprised" you, lol! Thanks for your support (how much do I owe you for this one? lol!)


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 15, 2008
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    Wow..

    I'm telling you lady right here and now..you really have talent, and it's scary how quickly you are looking like someone who's written a hundred pieces already!! I mean gosh, if you're this good now..imagine when you are at piece number 100?? excellent write and I really can't honestly find a problem with this.

    • Melrose
      October 15, 2008
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      Thanks

      If you keep encouraging and praising my work like this I'll get to #100 by the end of the week, lol! Thanks again for your kind words, Swan, your feedback has been invaluable.

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