Inside the house
is a heart
and it beats in silver
tones because all
you see is sky
when you look through
my closed window.
The cracks in the abode
come through the wall
but the heart does
not follow any set
tone, just listen
and hear jazz
between beats.
Author notes
Credit for picture: Chris Conrad "Lonely Window", 2003.
A contest entry
- Between by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended October 28, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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You've well-expressed your interpretation of the picture prompt.
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...and it beats in silver tones...
Oh I did like that line very much. There is such strong imagery with the use of silver in this line. Sky and heaven contrasting earth and shadow.
A lovely entry to this prompt. Thank you so much. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Thank you for the inspirational contests and the wonderful comments--also, Happy Halloween!
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You do not have a closed window
your heart beats GOLD.
Love your poem and the implied meanings of the house. I know that a house has a feel and you have written about it vividly and perceptiveley to give us a poem to wonder about.
I agree with arafura...you do not write often enough. In your poems, the positive side of yourself comes though. So, what about another, with some of your art as well?
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Thanks for the wonderful comment about this poem. This photograph really grabbed me and the reason is the frame of the window inside the frame of the picture. I wanted to convey that this could be an infinite loop but wonder if I succeeded? I would like to write more about this window.
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love this house and the atmoshere you inspire good luck x
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Thanks for the comment and especially that you love this house! Always good to hear from you!
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Wonderful! You don't write often enough my talented friend, but when you do it's always excellent!
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You say the nicest things--remember this is how I feel about your poetry also! Thank you for the wonderful comment!
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Unique, to take the "between of the theme and use
it as a pulse. Nice parallels to the photo prompt
while leaving room for metaphoric interpretation.
Blue
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This is a welcome and wonderful comment--thank you so much!
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