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better off dead?

i have a way of fucking the simplest things up
i can't even tell you how i feel without fighting
i'm a fuck up anyways who doesn't deserve to be happy
so you really shouldn't care that i feel this for you

go ahead just toss me out of you life
like some left over chinese food
i don't care how much i want you now
crying over you won't fix anything

i'm just a fucked-up bitch anyways
so go ahead and ignore me
maybe i'll go add a couple more scars
bleed it all out

you'll be sorry then for saying
all the shit you've said
will you be happier when i'm not around?
am i better off dead?

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  • lowercase prelude gold member
    June 23

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    Wow, a very intense and emotionally raw piece
    I am sorry that you feel this way and that this person makes it worse. But don't start cutting yourself because of it and you aren't all those things that you said you are.

  • Tyler-the-Grate
    December 8, 2008

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    that was intense!

    i haven't read such a violent poem in a while, although it was a good poem. i kinda like the way you just cut to the point. and no, i don't mean how you said you'll add a couple more scars. that is not the way to take care of your problems. if i were you, i would leave this guy be and take his ass out of your mind. just leave him, besides he'll probably forget about you. you should return the favor.