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One Winged Angel

 I slowly open my eyes as the roots of the earth let me down,

As my feet get closer to the water, my wings open and I begin to levitate.

My eyes shut tightly as my wings disappear.

My hair blows around as the wing rustles around me.

I pull my knees up to my chest, curling up.

As I fall into a deep,soundless sleep a bubble of blue, as soundless as night, folds around me,

Closing me out from the rest of the world and its' dangers.

And the last thing anyone remembers of me is that,

I was a one winged angel.

(This is my first poem I ever wrote. I wrote it a long time ago but I re-wrote it today :3. I hope you all enojy it. >>; Dont be hars. I know it's not perfect.)

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  • cg-frogz
    November 11, 2008
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    You did a great job. nice poem. keep writing.


  • Erica Carnea
    October 16, 2008
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    great poem
    love it
    always,, erica
    xx


  • Deathwolf Tasagka
    October 15, 2008
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    I thought the moral of it was..just beautiful. An emotion unfelt, an ocean unseen. I liked it alot, it gave alot of moral. Something that's hard to find in first wrote poems. And you dear lass, did a good job with that. Great write and welcome to allpoetry.

    Sincerely,
    Deathwolf Tasagka


    • heartbroken-kitten
      October 16, 2008
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      :3 thank you

      im glad to be here and im glad you liked it. your comment made me smile.;


  • silentemo
    October 15, 2008
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    I like it, its good.

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