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~ Love and Peace ~



love
exults
eternal
universal
peace



~ Written for You By: ~ James Lee Long ~

Author notes

I tried to portray the two things that I can relate to the most, Love ... and Peace.

Thank you for allowing me to enter your contest.

~ James ~

A contest entry

How and what did it make you feel?

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  • Alyzeh
    October 20, 2008
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    This is so short and simple, love how it holds so much meaning.

    Great write!


  • KayJay
    October 15, 2008

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    This form (from what I gather) is very Haiku like... the "aha" moment was soft but the form was spot on. Love how you condensed each line into a single word. Well done and best of luck.
    Ken

  • Illyannakari
    October 15, 2008

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    I liked how so much was expressed in so few words. I would have probably chosen the word eternal rather than forever, but that is just me. You did a great job.


  • Arkbear gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    Lovely indeed as Jeremy said.....one breath and you summed it all up.....however, the pondering* moment is a tad soft.....but....not bad

     

    Good luck & God bless you!

     

    Thanks for entering,

     

    Bear ~


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    October 15, 2008

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    Wow, this is great James!
    Well done and I hope that you do
    well this one in the contest!
    Thanks for sharing it here.




    Jeremy0826

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