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Visit to his chair { Silver }

Chastity leathers a belt,

tied across she struggles a breath.

Blue lipped silence,

drained white skin weeps.

Rotten teeth needs extraction,

tools metal the drill.

Gums raw,

bled by decease.

Anesthetic needle fires its lethal poison,

numbing...

as she slips into slumber of death.

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  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    Yep, still makes me shudder when I read it! Congrats on the silver hunni, fantastic job! Can I come out from behind the sofa now....?


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    I do believe that you've captured the true dark essence of the prompt with your poem.. the imagery is quite vivid & extremely dark. this is a powerful poem.. You did an outstanding job with both your poem & the prompt.

    good luck
    kat


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      October 22, 2008
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      Thanks Kat
      Loved the chance to write about a place I most dread.. Dentists lol!
      Love Mum xxx


  • daviscth silver member
    October 20, 2008

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    Wow Julie!! This is such a dark and powerful piece filled with emotions. You really id a great job. Good luck....


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    ow, what happened to the warning hun, lol, i think maybe a few too many painful visions come from this,. though its a fantastic write and the imagery is as always amazing, (maybe this time not such a good thing?)


  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Wow, this was so very powerful sis.
    I got so tied up in your words,
    I just had to read it over and over.
    Beautiful portrayals of darkness within,
    feeling a chill to the bone while reading,
    especially the ending.

    Always such original thoughts,
    and penned with brilliance.

    Best of luck in the contest

    Luv Megz


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 16, 2008
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    & Wow this is pitch! Such raw, painful imagery! Ewww pulling teeth, gotta be the most ouchie thing to ever envision! Superbly penned! So pleased its AM tho, not sure I'd like the dreams I'd get from this! Good luck in your contest


  • MysticalRayne
    October 15, 2008

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    Excellent job with the prompt ~ love where you took this best of luck in the contest


  • maralisa silver member
    October 15, 2008

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    julie your poem is brilliant very deep and powerful good luck in the contest my friend take care marina


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 15, 2008
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    wow very powerful!! You did an excellent job portraying this piece sis!!! I truly love it!!!


  • Topaze
    October 15, 2008
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    Wow quite the piece you have written here, well done, my best wishes in the contest.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    gaaaaah. What a chilling picture you paint with your twisted pen. Bravo. Bravo! Good luck to you in the contest!

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