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Ghost-written

one
chapter
ghost-written,
  unbleached of prose

ink

A contest entry

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  • KayJay
    October 15, 2008

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    Great form... the fall over of prose into the dead matter line confused me for a moment but since I couldn't have done better I'll just keep quiet and say... well done and best of luck...
    Ken

    • haley27 gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Thank you

      Thank you still having problems with that one line, I could use some sujestions. Haley27


  • sheltered
    October 15, 2008
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    excellent form

    • haley27 gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Thank you

      Haven't done one in a while. I'm glad you liked. Haley27


  • Arkbear gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    Cool......aesthetics are off a tad in L 3.....other than that.....a weeee bit choppy in Flow, but still gains favor from my gavel.....good luck & God bless you!

     

     

    Bear ~

    • haley27 gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Bear

      I changed it up L3, have another look. Thanks for commenting and reading. Haley27

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