the ebbing tide –
inevitable
as the evening
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an interesting litrtlew write you have penned here consideirng the point of view that you are talking about. I do like how th tide falls into the Haiku and also how the evening is a completely different time all together. anyw ays wonderfully penned as you tlak about in a weird way the moons effect upon tides
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Thank you - once again the ebbing tide and the evening (in this poem) are metaphors for death.
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Lovely!
It's always interesting for me to read Haiku in the 'modern form' by other writers. This is so smooth & penetrating!
I'm always learning & enjoying this form as it's expressed! Wow! I just looked up what this particular form of Haiku is and I'm floored.
Brilliantly done. You are a fine writer.
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Before reading Jeff's explanation, I had never heard of jisei. I like, however, the encapsulation in so brief a form of such a profound (and unavoidable) experience. Excellent jisei, Mairi.
Bill
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Thank you, Bill. You may like to see my further comment, addressed to Jeff, at the foot of the page.
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When I must die
And die I must
I want such thoughts
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before my friend dies
and a perfect blossom falls
I shall serve him tea -
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to die is sad
but a fools final end
is eased by tea
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Love the quiet power of this.
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Thank you. That is something I hope to achieve on the rare occasions I write jisei.
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some night soon in bed, whisper to me the art of your haiku?
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I shall.
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The flowing tide
irresistible
as the morning
Nice haiku
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Nice comment, thank you.
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In case my solely poetic friend has forgotten I shall remind him and you many other readers Jisei are Japanese death poems. It seems he is keener on life!
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I equate the jisei with the samurai ethic of "enjoy life to the full, and do not flinch from death"; typically, a jisei would be composed by a knight immediately before an honourable death at his own hands, but of course it may be written by anyone contemplating the inevitability of the end.
I always speak of "jisei" in the singular, because it is an ethic and a discipline in its own right.
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