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Ben

one
young man
no honor
he robs the weak
-Dog

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dog at the end was someone refering to him as a dog

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  • skies painted red
    October 15, 2008
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    shame he doesn't leave the state...


  • Arkbear gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    Hello :)

     

    Here is your Lanturne centered..>>>

     

     

     

    one
    young man
    no honor
    he robs the weak
    -Dog

     

    Can you see your aesthetics flawed?

     

    If you do a left-align, as you have, it should align such as this..>>>

     

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    I am looking for that perfection in your Form.....as did the Poets of ancient days of old for their Masters ~

     

    Thank you for entering.....and yes, you may enter again :)

     

    God bless you!

     

    Bear ~