dawn
breaking
she sees her
future in the
sun
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXVII - by Bear by Arkbear.
400 points, ended October 16, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is good
short and sweet
good luck in the contest
please return the favour
love always
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Beautiful Sentiments, Poet!!!
I love this brilliant li'l poem, it's as if she awakens to a new beginning, facing a brighter future ahead...
"dawn
breaking
she sees her
future in the
sun"
I'm amazed the judge doesn't see the meaning behind these hopeful, joyous lines... I would also like to go one step further and add this quote from Dictionary.com, on the meaning of the word, aesthetic: "A guiding principle in matters of artistic beauty and taste; artistic sensibility: a generous Age of Aquarius aesthetic that said that everything was art" (William Wilson). In my mind, as most artists believe, poetry is a matter of beauty and taste, cultivated in the reader. In other words, Mr. Arkbear really has no idea what he's speaking about... Wishing you the best of luck in all you do, and I look forward to reading more of your stunning work!! Peace always, Cyn 
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Wow, this is such an enlightening poem! Just reading this made it feel like I, myself, am the character in this poem. It's written so beautifully, and nature is always a language I understand very well. I love this.....the morning light is priceless.
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Oh my....tremendous Lanturne......the only problem here is your aesthetics ~
As you get to know me, you shall find out, I take Formed Poetry very seriously and consider it an Art, as did the ancient Poets who penned them for their Masters of old ~
Other than that, the best Lanturne yet.....beautiful
Good luck & God bless you!
Bear ~
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Thank you
Thank you... I have never used this form before. How would you change it aesthetically? You can let me know after judging... I don't want anything influencing your judging.
Thanks.
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Nothing influences my judging.....I am as fair a Judge as you can find
I would search for words which create the perfect Form of a Lanturne.....that IS the challenge....otherwise, anyone could place any words in a row to fit the syllabic count.....however, I am a NUT for Poetry in Form, as you can see on my Authors' page ~
Thank you for asking my advice......I hope to see you enter another....God bless,
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That's cool... I will look into that. Thanks for the input.
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