the
passion
cuddled Christ
to his embrace
tight
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXVII - by Bear by Arkbear.
400 points, ended October 16, 2008, 21 entries
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18000 points, ended April 28, 1014 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow, unusually short, but meaningful with feeling. =)
Good luck with the contest! =D -
Obviously this is some sort of form that goes "one syllable, two syllable, three syllable, four syllable, one syllable" - which I haven't come across, but in which case, you worked well with.
As this is short, there isn't a whole lot that I can write on it [in comparasion to the longer, more detailed comments that i've left on the more epic poems in this contest.]
It appears to be well written - following the rules of the form that you used, although personally, it doesn't particularlly appeal to me - although the words were descriptive type, they didn't bring an image to my mind, and so remained simply words on a page, if you follow me? But as I have said before, freeverse usually just isnt my thing
Thank you for entering though, and joinign my bid to make this the largest contest on AP
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Lovely Presentation and Message....perfect count...I feel your thoughts......good luck & God bless you!
Bear ~
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