Morning dew
gave a welcomed respite
to weary warriors
muscles tensed
and pulses pounded
with anticipation
as Sun’s rays caressed
spears and
polished shields
just before Alexander
gave the order
to attack.
Author notes
Prompt: Polish
30 to 40 words
I fashioned this piece after the conquest of Babylon by Alexander the great in 331 BC.
In a list
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest 10 entries 30 to 40 words #11 by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended October 16, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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What a glorious take on the prompt!! Such an amazing imagination and story telling ability you have MJ, even in such a few words! Love the splattering of alliteration through this too
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'as Sun’s rays caressed
spears and
polished shields'
my favorite part.. reminds me of that serene moment where you take in every little bit around you before heading in...
this could really only be written like that by someone who has felt that feeling.
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A very nice take on this idea. It is so funny how you can say almost nothing and it be everything. A wonderful poet.
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Great imagery and a piece of history as well...A sad ending to a strong and beautiful life, with a lost soul looking for it's home...
thank you for entering!
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intense and vivid, something that has always fascinated me. Alexander, the conqueror of the world, yet the world turned against him. a wonderful write!
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a wonderful take on the promt good luck in the contest
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OH NICE! I love where you went with this one. Excellent take on the prompt - right outside of the box. So good! ~Pamela
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...and you polished your words to a glowing intensity.
I sincerely hope your efforts are rewarded with a fitting reward because this poem, to me, is a wonderfully worded response to the prompt.
Love Margaret
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Thank you dear.
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