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So I Couldn't See

I found a very dear friend
in the darkness that surrounds
my body and soul.

This shadowy expanse
is not quite empty.

At the centre of this cocoon,
woven with strands of love and protection,
you can find me in sweet serenity.

The darkness is my security blanket,
my blindness is a blessing.

I have but one more friend,
here, beneath the blanket,
to hold me with warmth and patience.

I retreat to the darkness,
for when the final lights go out,
I can no longer see that I am apart from you.

Author notes

Was inspired by a quote from a contest I found last night to do with hiding hands under a pillow, but I couldn't find the contest again.

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  • WolfHeart
    November 9, 2008
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    Well done - very vivid imagery and strong structure.

  • StarGrrl
    October 15, 2008
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    Loved It!

    I love it. I like the way you ended it with the lights out thing. Great Write!