Trapped forever in this jar,
i've never been able to get very far.
The sands of time continue to flow,
but i have nowhere to go.
You tell me to wait, that you'll save me soon,
but every minute brings, impending doom.
Every second brings me closer to death,
right till the time when i have nothing left.
Please come soon and save me,
from this life of misery.
A contest entry
- Many Few Random Prompt Options Contest by No longer in use.
600 points, ended October 23, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short and Sweet by Kitch.
700 points, ended October 24, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i like this poem i feel like i am the person trapped inside.
but i hope you sort out what ever is bugging you
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yeaa, hope you'll get through it. God bless
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i feel like im there....and im going threw it right now
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it's great! and you're right, misery can trap us in a jar
good luck
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Hahas, thanks
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SAVE
*dooge* I am here to save you. lol. this is very good
this right here "You tell me to wait, that you'll save me soon,
but every minute brings, impending doom." is very strong
*&Hearts;*
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This reminds me of a butterfly. Perhaps, an outlook on how a butterfly feels when a human tries to capture it's beauty. But, I know you weren't aiming for that. I understand this, because I've felt it quite often myself. It's unfortunate. I hope you get out of this rut
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This is very done well.
Told to wait for something I'm expecting someone you love or a person you wish to be with. And it's eating you up inside not knowing how long to wait. Where, why?
Wonderful.
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Interesting Write
"Trapped forever in this jar,
i've never been able to get very far.
The sands of time continue to flow,
but i have nowhere to go."
Your imagery takes the reader to another height.
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