I've walked these fields of mourning
Through lost years of yearning
For that touch that once did raise me
To heights I've never known.
I felt your last breath warm me
And now you're waiting for me
I know you're waiting for me
Now the threshold you have crossed.
I see you as you were when I first knew you
We will walk these lands forever
And the time that we have lost
Will be a pebble in time's ocean
Endless ripples of devotion
My child I have a notion
We'll forever swim outside the tide.
Author notes
Stefano83
A contest entry
- Write Me A Poem!!! How Hard Is That? by PerfectImperfection.
600 points, ended October 28, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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Thank you for the entry, this is very good.
Good luck in both contest.
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i like this, it flows very nicely, i love the lines "and the time that have lost, will become a pebble in time's ocean, endless ripples of devotion" it is just such a powerful statement and it works perfectly, you can see the image but also how strong it is, great job, good luck in the contests!
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A very interesting piece of thought inspired by the contest image. The rhyme is scattered, without any particular rhythm - which we all have our tastes ... Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest.
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I like the final image of swimming outside the tide and I hope you will meet again. It's quite a spiritual poem.
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