Torn amongst innocuous light
and brilliant darkness.
Each hour an attempted comprehension
of the mess things are.
There was one whose eyes pierced the everdark.
He gathered your brokenness in his arms,
whispers stating: [departure is not an option].
He mended you, piecing together each bleeding fragment
with hands that spoke of safety.
There was one whose heart beat at the sam.e frequency.
He made you shimmer technicolour,
refracting all the blissful standpoints every fairytale lacked.
He s.h.a.t.t.e.r.e.d you, exploding into blinding oblivion
with eyes that mirrored the impossible.
A correlation of shelter and reckless eternity.
The night's resolve is wavering.
Author notes
"siroi yami no naka" = "in the white darkness" (in japanese)
*clutches at tearing heart-muscles*
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A contest entry
- freeverse & prose [emotions attached] by xxRainbowDawnxx.
600 points, ended October 26, 2008, 35 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Just Love Fantastic Titles by 2lullabyhaven.
650 points, ended December 20, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congratulations on writing something that didn't have the word "I" in it!
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heh
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Very good, thanks for your entry
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nice onee.
love it.
by the way, shouldn't it be shiroi?
not siroi?
good poem.!
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haha hmmm, i think it's siroi...
guess i could be wrong, though.
=P
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love that word... "everdark"
I hate the idea that there is actually a girl out there that has a bigger vocab than me... Your mastering of the English language pisses me off... I think you should die.
I will suggest that this is very contempary (damned spelling)...Is that what you choose for it to be? Becuase im starting to see a pattern in your works... -
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lolll mastering of the english language?
"everdark" isn't even a real word.
XD
and i have no idea whether it is meant to be comtemporary...im obviously not sophisticated enough to be able to catagorise my own work...
=P
PS. pattern? o_0
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heartfelt read, its all hand in hand but then the last two lines throw me off a bit. it speaks of love and a time in one's life where it was needed to say the least, thats my take anyways and it was very enjoyable.
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:)
do you mean the night's resolve is wavering?
and i take entire credit because i said to use innocuous XD
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ahahah yes, damn typo!
=P
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Very beautiful, expressive and deep in many ways. I love how you used a different language in your title. Very fantastical, but also real. I can feel it painted in my mind.
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