Slit wrists and throats,
For the weak ones.
Executions,
For the scared.
Hangings,
For the sad ones.
Overdoseing,
For those who fear.
I qualify for each,
And every damned one.
I知 weak, I知 scared, I知 sad, I fear.
And I値l scream from the rooftops,
I値l yell it across the boiling seas,
I値l sing it from brisk aired mountains,
Lord can you help me?
Doctor do you know what ails me?
For I have not a clue.
He whispers across the dim lit room,
In a funny show tone way.
We all are dying.
It is not about knowing the day,
Rather your output in each and every way.
So he licks his two front fingers,
And with a ghastly gasp,
He chocks the candle痴 wick.
A flame has lost its life
Yet in the light does dwell,
The remainder of its smoke,
And an eerie dusky smell.
What will you leave behind?
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 7 of 7
-
Wow!! I read your page before I read this poem so I had a bit of background information, but this is extremely powerful on its own. While I have not had to deal with the issues you have been through, I have been through my own, and I can relate to the uncertainty and fear that comes with it, and can only imagine how much worse it is for some. Powerful piece, Nice write. Love the ending.
-
I窶冤l yell it across the boiling seas
is an exquisite line!
then;
A flame has lost its life
Yet in the light does dwell,
The remainder of its smoke,
And an eerie dusky smell.
most excellent poem, i truly adore the end even more, you have quite a gift there, a depth of talent that we the reader are quite fortunate to have read, keep on keeping on, your words have the potential to reach many, i figure all our cracks lets out the light, you definately have a brilliant light
ok, see you tomorrow for more reading! (=-))
PEACE
-
Brilliant!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is something out of a sci fi fiction horror movie. The fear, taste upon the tounge. You have successfully transmitted me into this person! I think, feel, and see everything about this person, and it's very scary... The last line was nothing short of genius! What will you leave behind, has so many meaning, None the same. Great work, I look forward to reading more!
-
OMG!!!
This was really. . . inspiring, in a way. The ending was great. This has a LOT of emotion put into it. Return the favor, Please?
-
Stunning...
Very well written piece, very thought provoking!!
Enjoyed this very much. x -
great write you did A good job with getting your thoughts and feelings out on here.
the last line so harsh to me i was just talking about this with a friend crazy.
keep up the work,
vanna -
I think it's really good .You've been able to transmit emotions ,feelings .I enjoyed reading it .The way you've described this person and his pains is great .I can easily imagine everything in my mind and your poem has sth powerful inside since it takes me to a darker place .Keep it up!
Adding your comment:
1 - 7 of 7
