A mattress stained
But whose to blame
When lovers are untrue
The game of pain
And sheets of blue
They are stained too
Foolish me
And foolish you
We shared a bed
Not meant for three
But willingly
You shared with glee
And now the time
Has come to pay
We played the game
Now it's touche'
Was it just lust
Deep in your eyes
Or just a measure
Of great surprise
You laughed and giggled
It was such fun
Now he is gone
On the run
Those magic moments
Those nights of bliss
The early morning
That tender kiss
There all now gone
And there's just flesh
The naked body
I've laid to rest
So move on forward
And play his game
That lover large
And you, no shame
But in the end
The Sun will rise
And no more tears
He'll have your lies.
By Bob Fox
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I am adding this to the finalist list I really loved how you petray porayal
This was so good!!
The Positives:
Great rhytme and ryme I love the style. You have an excellent and entertaining poem here.
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
So move on forward
And play his game
That lover large
And you, no shame
But in the end
The Sun will rise
And no more tears
He'll have your lies.
That is one powerful ending love it!!
Overall:
I give this an 9/10 you did great. Thanks so much for entering I hope to see you in my future contests.
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Well coyote ....
seems like you been up to your old tricks again.
the old back door butter and egg man.....
People that commented here seem to miss that ..
ya gotta work at it....
it happens for a reason....
ya dont make a promise
and leave it at that ...
ya got to move it...
work with it...
other wise the inevitable happens...
we all just people... we want to be loved...and we will seek it.
PEACE BROTHER,
LOWELL POE
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excelent
A very prolific and volatile poem, i liked it very much the title had me from the start, this was an incredible poem
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This is so amazing! It had my mouth open at the end.
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Well heck, I can relate to this Bob! My ex was a serial cheater so I was glad to pass him and his lies off to someone else!
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Sad how people can treat their loved ones like that. I have been fortunate being married to the same lady for over 25 years. I have seen so much of distrust in my friends relationships and that is no place that either my wife nor I would want to go.
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I'm a very...untrusting person. Been burned by a boyfriends, girlfriends, and even my exhusband in the area of fidelity. I find it very hard to trust my husband, whom I love so much it hurts, based on past experiences. I know it hurts my husband that I can't trust him, I wish this was something I could change. I'm working on it. That's all I can do, is work on my trust issues, stemming way back.
I love reading what you write, it always has purpose, and meaning. You always touch me on one level or another.
~Monica
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Learn to trust him or he'll leave you.
"I know it hurts my husband that I can't trust him, I wish this was something I could change."
I left my ex for exactly that reason. I kept thinking that she would learn to trust me but, instead, the jelousy issue just got worse and worse. It was ridiculous. We'd be sitting in a restaurant and she'd burst into tears because a pretty girl walked by. She was like, "You were looking at her!" I was like, "No, not really. I'm just sitting here eating my dinner and you're making a scene."
She thought that jelousy was a sign of love. But, in reality, she poisoned a loving relationship with her suspicions until there was nothing left of it worth saving, and then it was over.
p.s. I NEVER touched another woman when I was with her. It was all in her head. -
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I hear what you're saying. I don't freak out if my husband looks at another woman, chances are, if she's hot, I'm checking her out too. It would be easier to trust my husband if my exhusband had not molested my daughter from her ages of 3yrs-6yrs old.
I can't use that as a cop out or excuse to not trust my current hubby, I know. To this day though, I still fear my exhusband. I think I always will. I had a total of 8 Protection Orders against him, he was so abusive. It's hard to realize that not all men are out to hurt women/children.
Take care & I hope you have a great weekend!
~Monica
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Yes, one should not generalize. My ex had been cheated on by a past bf but, as I pointed out, that wasn't my problem.
Of course, women aren't the only ones guilty of over-generalization. I've known guys who were total mysogynists because some past gf screwed them over.
Everybody should just treat everybody else as individuals.
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sadly, this happens to people. I like the poem, but wish that there wasn't this subject matter. to many of us have to deal with cheaters and people who say they love us...
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My friend
The sad truth is that this behavior is prevelant in todays world. Even here on AP there are players and cheaters. It is anywhere you go. But you are young. Perhaps things will change and marriage vows will mean something again. -
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I've done studies of human history and found this behavior everywhere, which says to me it's human nature. But if this is human nature, I want to be something else. I'm not saying everyone is this way, however. Marriage vows mean something only to the people who want them to mean something. As soon as someone stops believing in them, they loose it.
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Wow. Cheaters seem to have no respect sometimes, it really amazes me. A emotional write chara.
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Wow Bob, I can relate to this poem in not so good ways.....Any way I liked it, good ryhme too it just flowed together in such a nice way Good Job
Loves
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Theres certainly been a lot of hurt in your life my friend... I can feel each word I read of yours... very emotional indeed, thank you for sharing, xxx
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Karen
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I really am so very sorry you have been so hurt... you certainly do not nor did not deserve it ... xxx
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A very truthful and painful write Bob and one a lot of people may well be able to relate to. Very well written and a great moral ending.
All the best Sue
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wow. you adults are worse than us teens!!! (just kidding) this is good. especially towards the end. i like this. .... so much for not putting up any more poems. I won't let you forget that!!!
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Hmm...I'm starting to understand how much different it is to be an adult than a teen. Loved this piece. Great work.
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wowza matie done it again
fab poem says loads
ope i never ave to go through that 1
cheating never pays off hurts 2 much
cheers abe
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Right on Bob...
I been there 3 times lol, so how many does that make...9?
oh well, it's all in the game so they say, only they didn't say which game...
sometimes ya got to find out the hard way, and that ain't easy
Totally relate
John
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I am a divorcee, this is a great piece, relative in many ways.
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ouch bob. we just bought blue sheets,,better keep an eye out lol , great gutsy write again
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Three is a crowd indeed, and once trust is damaged [no matter how long it took to build it up], it's damaged forever, and can be very hard to fix once again ....
by the way, I believe mattress has two t's in it, no?
take care of your self Bob
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Heh'... I thought someone had wet the bed at first Bob, when I'd only seen the title
Interesting that here even with the references to 'blame, pain, foolish', there's no real sign of any discomfort that I detect. Other than 'he'll have your lies' there is none and what are we to know... he may have been off doing the same thing?
We can create big, big problems, leaping in without thought, but I don't detect any moral judgement going on here. This reads more like references alluding to what perhaps we think others would think about it, which doesn't really matter. We are witness to ourselves and it's us that know when we have betrayed ourselves or not... I reckon.
Sleep easy Bob...
Lovely, faultless flow and rhyme, great word use, very, very nice poem my friend!
Sol
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Yes Bob trust is such a fragile thing and when it's broken too many times, the walls of self preservation are built.
A very sombre and thought provoking write.
Thank you for sharing.
Gaylene
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Three is a crowd !
So the players play and the wounds of lust taint the sheets.
I wrote one very similar to this
Its seems to effect so many people, where has the loyal hands of true love gone. When lustful temptation takes over.
Brilliant hun
Best wishes
Julie
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Heartsore
This is a heartsore write.A why bother at all if love is not treasured and only made a mockery of.Oh what of those you do believe,you are only used...how can there be no more tears?Ever hopeful you are that the sun will rise...perhaps you have found what I miss all the time.
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Ah Jane
I am older and have been part of many relationships. I just guess my trust has been broken to many times. Even now here on AP, where most is make believe. I see the lies and games. Always a constant reminder that I should never allow any emotions of love towards a women. -
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Jane is jaded
towards love.I am not a player,never was,never will be - I have a conscience.And even though I am young, much experience in relationships and the selfish hurtful games which are played.
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The truth will always come out in the end and the piper shall demand to be paid. Such is life. For the very few who live honest lives there is no problem, for the rest of us we must accept responsibility for our own actions, and live with it. Well said my poet friend.
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The rise and fall of a marriage.....Somewhere along the way the foundation to our great nation was cracked and from that crack seeps the demise of our society... Seems people are always in a hurry to marry and spend a fortune on it only to not take their vows seriously. Such a shame....We are just paving the way for our children to act the same....
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