Love was not the plan
Spillage from the cracks
of dry rotted support
leaked acid
burning into my heart
She fancied pain
Tattoos covering tattoos
of severed ties
Her temple buried secrets
and I
the tomb raider
caught in the trap
Author notes
Poem by Afroqban
Option# 5.) Write about the day you met/saw the person who changed it all.
A contest entry
- Prompts; by Hell In Harmony.
2200 points, ended November 18, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love how you started it with
~Love was not the plan~
and ended with
~caught in the trap~
That was genius.
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Tattoos covering tattoos
of severed ties
Her temple buried secrets
The images here are so well drawn; and I like how the take on the prompt progresses- like a meeting of real people, real lives.
Cool
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Spillage from the cracks
of dry rotted support
leaked acid
burning into my heart
accidental slant rhyme perhaps?
She fancied pain
Tattoos covering tattoos
of severed ties
simple. i like it.
and I
the tomb raider
caught in the trap
good ending <3.
goodluck and thanks!!
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"accidental slant rhyme perhaps?"
I guess so, didnt notice it until u said something. but then again it sounded good in my head while drinking my beer lol
thanks for reading, cheers
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