Lying upon the shores of insanity
Stripped bare of my freedom
The doorway to my innocence
Forever closed behind me
I remain lifeless and
Eternally lost in torment
Without reprieve
© 2008 Gerald W. Locke Jr.
Author notes
Option #2
Credit for the pic: http://freaky665.deviantart.com/art/forever-gone-forever-you-97825699
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What a great take on the picture. Amazing write, as always!
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powerful
So telling a write, " The doorway to my innocence"
"Forever closed behind me". well written ...being a victim of child molestation this part was very chilling for me. -
Wow...this is really dark. That's not a bad thing, mind. I like this poem a lot. I think you responded to the prompt well. The poem has a very nice flow. I'm just wondering, would it sound more absolute if you changed it so that torment is in the last line:
Eternally lost in
Torment without reprieve
or would that change the tone of the poem? Just a suggestion. It sounds fine as it is.
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Well I thought you done well with the prompt... I personally don't enter many prompt contest. Main reason People can have many different views on it, and the one which comes closest to the Judges View always wins. The contest may be over but you still get 3 clappies from me.
All the best
~T.S~
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I really like your poem a lot. You did a great job with the prompt. I do need to let you know that this contest is anonymous which means your name can't be anywhere on the poem. I understand the need for a copyright.. AP has one that automatically goes on each poem its located on the upper right hand side of the page. this is just to inform you, so next time you know.
good luck in the contest
kat
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