there was water...
clenched between gaping hands
and thumbing through palm-lines -
erasing the prints.
this is where the world
stopped turning and sealed itself
into the lining of the moon
my wrists are blue,
threading through the craters
in my chest putting tally marks
on my enamel.
gum lines fall loose
and pry bone from jaw
to jut out and grasp
the mirror, like octopi
reaching for sea maidens
in wind storms -
but tink against porcelain
to shatter ear drums,
bleed onto taste buds and stick.
my reflection hangs in tatters,
fingernails pressing into sink drains
to catch lost calcium
& press the nourishment into
distended eye sockets, that hang limp
like stillborns.
death smiled at the touch.
I could smell it between heartbeats,
pulling the sky in between shredded lungs
to purge the metaphor from Bible pages - -
my skull is rotting...
pushing extensions through
staggered flesh
and disappearing into wonderland.
Author notes
I have this dream where my teeth keep falling out...
wonder if it means something?
hmm... not too sure about this to be honest. i tried.
i'm trying to get out of the habit of using so many pronouns... so yeah...
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Comments
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what talent you have, excellent poem
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Okay, you have done what I hoped people would do and turned a dream into a poem. It did work, at least for me. I think the teeth dream is not uncommon and I may have even looked up the meaning once... I've had teeth falling out dreams. Although nothing quite like this.
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Good enough that it made me shudder a bit
Thank you for an image-rich and well put together entry.
Good luck.
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Be sure about this, it's good.
I have the weirdest dreams too. I think dreams where teeth/appendages fall off/out have to do with loss of control. Something like that. I've had dreams like that, lol. There's alot of lines I really liked in this piece, too many to copy and paste. Nice work.
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I loved the imagery conveyed by "like octopi
reaching for sea maidens
in wind storms -". Some parts of this made me feel a little squeamish - which shows how powerful the piece was.
Keep penning.
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dude i LOVE this!!!! Its awesome!!!
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