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My suicide letter

The Pain that wallows around my head
The Unasscery sadness,
My life means nothing to me
It sits there like an unused
toy.

It stares back at you the pain
it never goes away its your best
friend but it never helps you
in your time of need

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • xXemo-teddybearXx
    November 24, 2008

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    man u r a really good writer
    this was really good
    ummm i would just say add a bit more details so that its longer and ya other than that it was good