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I have something to say
A secret I have held within my head
The secret is this...
But would it be wrong to set it free?
To give this sin a taste of liberty?
No, she must be said
So here we go again

I have a message I would like to tell
This concealed lie I've been itching to yell
My lie to the world is...
No, No, I dare not say
Confined to my mind it shall stay
Though maybe if I confess
And get this weight lifted from my chest
That's it I must make known
No longer can this issue be postponed

Here it is all on the line
I shall pour my soul upon this rhyme
My secret is held within these words I say
My unutterd words shall be said today
Upon these worthless lies
I shall no longer rely
And will now admit that I....Shhhhhh

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  • McRae by nature
    November 28, 2008

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    Amazing. This perfectly describes that moment when someone stands in front of you asking "Is something bothering you." And a part of you just wants to blurt it out as fast as you can before you lock the door and simply say.... "I'm fine"

    Great write, well worth gold

    Carrie


  • kyle052411
    November 23, 2008

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    I loved this poem! I believe everyone has a secret they want/need to tell the entire world but we fear rejection. Nice job!


  • Mozaic
    November 11, 2008

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    Cat & mouse game...

    I loved how you played with the tone of this & kept it entertaining and wanting me to read on to find out more...good read!


  • FaerieNWonderland
    October 30, 2008
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    i like the flow of the poem. very deep and well written

  • kimberlee meredith
    October 24, 2008

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    I like the rhyme and flow of this poem very much! I like the mood behind your lines, hopeful and touching yet teasing with the reader. I couldn't wait to get to the last stanza to find out this great secret but, I guess, it wasn't meant to be..

    "I have a message I would like to tell
    This concealed lie I've been itching to yell"
    --Great emotion and feeling!

    Thanks for posting, I enjoyed reading your poem very much.

  • kerry25
    October 22, 2008
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    i found this really interesting and exciting to rea


  • Jalalbad gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    yes secrets are to be kept, is why they are secrets. Thought it is hard to fool one with much insight, be it a lover or a friend. All hell breaks loose when some secrets come into the light


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    October 19, 2008
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    I`ve seen your secret between the lines
    and yes she must be kept a secret, Shhhhhhhhh!
    Well done


  • Lislaine
    October 15, 2008
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    This is sooo amazing I can so relate to this!! WOW


  • XxYoru-OkamixX
    October 15, 2008

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    omfg, that is amazing. that is really original and i like it very much... expecially how you never end up telling the secret. it is a very good poem. good luck in the contest, i'm sure you'll do well. ^^

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