Life’s river slowly carving course through earth,
As sediments’ stories emerge under
Silt layers of time, glisten at their birth
Soon forgotten with next era’s wonder.
Loam’s deep imprints by deceased buffalo
whose hooves beat between lines of Earth Mother,
trapped by footsteps of progressing plateau,
ancient worlds fade into one another.
Shades of memory through water’s concourse
cuts into alluvial heart that beats,
rapids of change with primordial force
crushes soul’s stratum beneath ancient feats.
Residue’s synthesis in eddies fly
eternally past tales that never die.
Author notes
sonnet
Option: Grand Canyon
graphic: http://www.astrofoto.ca/stuartheggie/Grand_Canyon/Grand_Canyon_23.jpg
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A contest entry
- Tour De Monde - Stage 7 by Errant Panther.
400 points, ended November 2, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Mmm i really enjoyed this poem
The use of a sonnet is not very normal for me to read, but this was pulled off quite beautifully,
Having been there before a few times, the descriptions you used really hit home and painted a gorgeous relatable picture.
Great job, Much respect -
great use of form and some very lateral thinking shown here, wonderful use of earth refeernces that give strength to the piece and help "ground" our thoughts (however life makes them fluctuate) back to the primal sense there is a ,uch bigger picture that we are part of.
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yeah it would figure that you would get into no-holds barred mode..this is FANTASTIC...perfect rhyme and flow and all in a Sonnet...(my fave form)...WONDERFUL WRITE...thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..It was an honor competing against you...blessings..namaste..
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I don't know much about sonnets - but this poem flowed very well and I loved the quality of rhyme that you maintained throughout
this is a mervellous look at the history of the ages and a brilliant take on the prompt - I really like this poem, it speaks to me in a beautiful way I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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Hello Susan, I'm at a loss to comment on this piece of work, as I don't understand a thing about free verse or its makeup, however I do wish you all the best in the contest.Val
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