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Ocean

Wash away the beach
With your long silky fingers
..or are they just waves?

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Something I wrote a decade ago, so please pardon the crappiness.

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  • Heroesrox
    February 19

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    Brilliant write! I really liked the imagery and emotion that this ppiece gives off! I love this so much! I love haikus and have several up on here! Thanks so much for the share! Maybe you can stop by and read my haikus sometime!

    Thanks!

    Heroesrox


  • Sam.M.
    January 21

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    Your first two lines seem like they might lead into more, and I'm not sure if it would be nicer if you continued on that thought but your third line, although making for an abrupt end, definitely struck and made me think. The insight and question this poem makes you think about is very good. I can't interpret it myself as to what it might mean, but the fact that it makes me think this much deserves two applauds, good job.