Do me a favour
play our love song, Commitment
leaves me feeling, addicted and trapped
no need for your guitar
your fingers strum to my movement
blue eyes sing the words
your glare can freeze the time I live by
settle me in your reality
never hinting a dash of mercy
pity does not exist in your emotions
I'm hypnotized, by flash backs of your smile
your mixed CD's fly in my direction
pinning me to your minds white wall
I'm silenced
shunned and ignored by your empty promise
one day I'd be your only
I'm just a muse
I let your finger tips gently taint my skin
with a pertinent signature that can't be seen or erased
I belong to you
though I am not your only
I'll learn to survive your jail
constructed by sanity's white walls.
Author notes
sometimes your left with nothing but entrapment of love. The result clouds your judgment of reality.
A contest entry
- LoveMeTenderly by ThnxsForTheMmrs-x-.
750 points, ended January 5, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~*~Be My Muse~*~ by Zane Rose.
800 points, ended January 18, 21 entries
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I wanted more of a happy relationship poem, but I get this all too well.
Aside from that I really like the imagery in this piece. Everything related back to the music and being a muse... I love it. It is a very well written piece.
Good job, good luck, and keep up the great writing!
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From begginging to end, a very enduring peiece. Still, not what I was looking for but I think I might just go in a whole other direction.
Thank you and good luck -
thank you
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wow. there isn't one part of this poem that jumps out and grabs my attention, it all fits perfectly, amazing.
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thanks I'm glad it is
I had fun writing it as well.
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just what i was looking for
imagery was gorgeous...though i 'glair' is spelled wrong...this is good
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