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Don't Give Up

yo listen up this goes out to anyone who had tried or who going to try or just failed you know you screwed up don't just give up cause if I know you failed at life don't let you get down get up be proud of yourself not just to you but to everyone you can say look at me I came this far but failed and now I am going to try again to see if you can but you failed so you get up and keep going till you pass at what you failed at what do you think if you had a hero when they failed they got right back and tried again you should know when you failed you can get up and ask for help and say I am got to pass this what I failed at so you can sometimes get a second chance at this but if you don't you failed but if you need help just ask for it
say you wont fail look at your hero's did they fail at sometime in their lives yes but did they stay down no they tried again to prove to them selves they could do it so can you just don't stop giving in to people saying you are not good get up prove to them you deserve a second chance at this cause you know you can do it but you don't want to so just get up and try it doesn't hurt to try again in life you can always try it wont hurt you if you pass you know you did it so believe and go for that chance to succeed and not fail so get up and  do it just believe and you can do it go for it

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  • Candy6
    November 19, 2008
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    Great written poem


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    November 1, 2008
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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    Interesting as a piece of prose. Or a freeform.
    Not much of a poem.
    Full stops are your friend. Use them to allow the reader to stop and absorb your words without losing their place before they move on.

    You're right. We should never back down, never give in.

    Welcome to Allpoetry
    I hope that you enjoy the site, and if you have any questions please don't hesitate to ask


  • cbsbecm88
    October 14, 2008

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    this poem was encouraging but it aslo wasn't much like a poem. it was very difficult to read without any puncuation. good message, ok write.