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Her Sun is Dying from Inside Out

I watch her -
Her, my love, my laugh,
my life.

I see the love in the light
that shines in her eyes -
and the shine is like a dagger:
Piercing -
Pain -

I am her Air -
and I am her Sun -
And she chooses him.

Can she not make a choice?
Or can I not go away?
Why am I hanging by the tips of her fingers -
Wrapped around every word she speaks?
Why am I suspended in the air
My life, my happiness
depending on her very being?
Why am I entwined
in the webs of her silver lies?

Why is my heart
ensnared in a cage
of her broken promises?

And Why do I still watch -
And stay -
When I see them embrace?

Does she know that her Sun is dying inside out?

Author notes

Option 4

I'm not a Twilight fan at all - but I do like S. Meyer's other book, the Host! - however, I do like Jacob. He's so much more real than the other characters.

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JACOB IS AWESOME. *flees impending Edward Fans* Haha. I had to do that.

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  • Symphony
    February 17

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    I'm not a Twilight fan either, so I was trying to piece this together;

    Well, when I say I'm not a twilight fan, I mean that I've never seen the movie OR read the books so all I know is that it's about a girl who falls in love with a boy and then finds out he's a vampire

    HOwever, knowing now that this is about it, the poem does make more sense, and i just LOVE that title,

    "The sun is dying from the inside out" <-- wow, wthere's something very inspiring about that, i'm not sure what it is, but just ... something...

    Thanks for entering


    • checkmate-
      February 22
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      Thank you for the comment This poem can pretty much fit into any love triangle she-loves-him, he-loves-her, he-loves-her-too relationship, if that helps

      -Paradox


  • upperworld06
    October 18, 2008
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    off the chain! love Jacob lol, host is m favorite book by her too. good write


  • Missa
    October 15, 2008

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    you dont like twilight! and another because you like jacob! but GREAT poem!!!!

    • checkmate-
      October 15, 2008
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      Hehe, thanks for reading this

      Yes, I do like Jacob. Most seem to disagree with me on that, but oh well.

      ~Athena


  • Bohemianwriter
    October 15, 2008

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    WOOOOW! HEARTWRENCHING!!!!

    THAT WAS UNBELIEVABLY!, HEART BREAKINGLY, AMAZING!!!!
    I LOVEDEVERY PART OF IT, A VERY UNIQUE FLOW!, I LOVED IT! AND YOUR IMAGERY IS JUST PHENOMENAL!, I CAN TRULY SEE AND FEEL THE LOVE JACOB HAS FOR BELLA I'VE ALWAYS SAID THAT HE LOVES HER MORE THAN EDWARD SOME OF YOU MAY DISAGREE WITH THAT BUT THATS JUST MY OPINION!.
    ABSOLUTLEY GREAT WRITE! I REALLY ADORE THIS!
    THANKS FOR ENTERING! AND GOOD LUCK!

    P.S AFTER JACOB IS ONE OF MY FAV CHARACTERS TO *thumbs up*...

    XXX


    • checkmate-
      October 15, 2008
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      Thank you

      Jacob is AWESOME

      Thanks for reading

      ~Athena


  • JaycobKay
    October 15, 2008

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    That was good, though I didn't really get the flow.
    A bit of editing may help.
    Other than that I really liked "Why am I hanging by the tips of her fingers
    Wrapped around every word she speaks?"


  • beachhoney9
    October 14, 2008
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    beautiful

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