I’d really like to thank you
From the bottom of my heart
And although sometimes words are not enough
There’s no better place to start
Because your always very kind to me
In my times of need
An act i truly regard
As a very noble deed
They say that no two persons
Can ever be the same
Well if this is a fact
Then what a crying shame
Because if there were more like you
Amongst the human race
The world would surely be
So much a better place
So in case throughout my busy life
I never take the time
To show my appreciation
I give you this thank you rhyme
Author notes
Option 1
A contest entry
- October New Member's Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended November 6, 2008, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Hi,
I would just like to wish you the best of luck
in the contest
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I love the poem of appreciation. If I may suggest getting rid of filler words like: "Because your always very kind to me. That can be short to :always kind to me, .... Just make sure you do a little editing.
Lady Altheia
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I think this is a very fine, heartfelt ‘thank you’.
I do have several suggestions. Feel free to ignore them if you think they are unworthy.
line 3 would balance better if it said something like
“though words are sometimes not enough”.
line 5: “Because of all your kindness”
lines 11 & 12: “Well, there should be more folks like you,
I’m here to proclaim.” Granted, my suggestion on lines 11 & 12 are not the
best lines ever written. Still there is something to be said about not throwing in clichés. 
Remember: the more fine tuning you do, the better your chance of winning.
Good luck.
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How very sweet and nice.. a simple yet heart felt note of appreciation
Well done.. Thanks for this entry in our contest!!
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A very nice show of appreciation to someone that enriches your life. Wonderful poem, good luck.
♥
whisper
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Hi argyll2002
This is a wonderful dedication poem you have written, loved the rhyming. Great poem, good luck in the contest and keep writing
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"...Because if there were more like you
Amongst the human race
The world would surely be
So much a better place..."
There is such truth within these words. If only we took the time to care a little more, be a little more grateful, then this world would be a better place to live indeed.
A few minor details:
"Because your always very kind to me": 'Your' should be 'you're'. Grammar and punctuation are important, since misspellings and misuses of words can detract from your full message or effect. I highly recommend proofreading your work; it makes it easier for your readers to understand.
Welcome aboard, and good luck!
Laura, aka Immortal
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A very sweet thank you sent across your page. I like how you ended it, summarizing the whole piece. Very nicely done.
Welcome to AP and good luck in the contest.
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I do have to agree with Cookiezeal, I think she said it best.
This is a wonderfully sweet "thank you" write. nice flow of thoughts and feeling.
Great job.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is a very nice apperciation poem, I hope that you show this write to the person that it is for. When I was reading it, one line sorta stuck out for me "They say that no two persons".. I think perhaps it may sound better with the word people, vs. persons? This is only a suggestion. Thanks for sharing, and best of luck in the contest. -
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Hello Argy,
I think the line "then what a crying shame" did not go well with the line previous to it. I think maybe if you revise this line to allow a better flow, your poem would be that much better.
I really liked this poem. I think we often forget to achknowledge the people who make a difference in our lives, we take for granted that they know how important they are to us and sometimes, that is not the case.
I believe in always telling those you love that you love them.. you never know when it will be your last chance to show them how much they mean to you.
I hope that you will share this poem with the person you wrote it for. I am sure they will enjoy it!
Good luck in the contest poet,
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I like the sentiment of this poem there are a few things that you could fix up (things like where you have 'your' instead of 'you're'; and an uncapitalised 'i') - but apart from those kinds of edits this has a lovely tone and feeling behind it 
- I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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This is darling. A Hallmark greeting card variety, it has the timeless appeal to give a kick upward.
Very clearly addressed, nicely written, and nearly
perfect rhyme. Aside from the punctuation (period), this is as good as this type gets! Thank you
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Hi argyll2002
This is a wonderful poem, i hope you give it to the one you are writing it for Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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I like this poem a lot except for the final line. I think that it makes a nice poem a bit trite.
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